Evil Adverbs (LY) In dialouge.

Don't trust JK Rowling. Well do in some cases, but not when it comes to using ly.

Although she is not the only published author that is know to over use sharply hastily quickly etc in her writing, she is perhaps the only one called out on it by Stephen King.

Don't get me wrong, I love Rowling, she is someone to be admired for not only her ability to paint a picture with words, but also her huge heart and great spirit.

In fact she gave over 15m dollars to an MS hospital, I have a huge heart for all philanthropy, but MS hits home because my sister has it.

Nevertheless Rowling does over use ly in her dialogue. I have listened to every single one of the Books on CD, and at times even Jim Dale (the narrator) fumbles over words because it doesn't feel natural to be told how someone says something.

I advocate reading your MS aloud, I did this again today and eliminated TONS of words that made it hard to read. This is something that should be done (imho) it forces you to read what you wrote rather than what your mind is seeing on the paper.


How goes the querying? Well more rejections this week. One helpful and the rest just form.
I am currently not querying anymore, as I am doing some major revamping and considering rewriting the first page of my MS. Anyway the stats are below.

Sent 15
Requests for Partials 1
From Rejections on Query 3
Helpful Rejection on Query 1
Rejections on Partials 1